Author: arma Date: 2013-09-21 09:33:11 +0000 (Sat, 21 Sep 2013) New Revision: 26360
Modified: website/trunk/en/index.wml Log: more clarifying work throughout
Modified: website/trunk/en/index.wml =================================================================== --- website/trunk/en/index.wml 2013-09-21 09:19:41 UTC (rev 26359) +++ website/trunk/en/index.wml 2013-09-21 09:33:11 UTC (rev 26360) @@ -23,11 +23,11 @@ </div> <div class="subcol-container clearfix"> <div class="subcol first"> - <h2>What is Tor?</h2> <p>Tor is free software and an open network that helps - you defend against a form of network surveillance that + <h2>What is Tor?</h2> <p>Tor is free software and an open + network that helps you defend against traffic analysis, + a form of network surveillance that threatens personal freedom and privacy, confidential business - activities and relationships, and state security known as <a - href="<page about/overview>">traffic analysis</a>.<br> + activities and relationships, and state security.<br> <span class="continue"><a href="<page about/overview>">Learn more about Tor »</a></span></p> </div> @@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ connection from learning what sites you visit, and it prevents the sites you visit from learning your physical location. Tor works with many of your existing applications, including - web browsers, instant messaging clients, remote login, and + web browsers, instant messaging clients, and other applications based on the TCP protocol.<br><span class="continue"><a href="<page getinvolved/volunteer>">Get involved with Tor »</a></span></p> </div> @@ -61,7 +61,8 @@ <a href="https://tails.boum.org/"><img src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Tails.jpg" alt="Tails Icon"></a> <h3><a href="https://tails.boum.org/">Tails</a></h3> - <p>Live CD/USB distribution preconfigured to use Tor safely.</p> + <p>Live CD/USB operating system preconfigured to use + Tor safely.</p> </div> </td> <td> @@ -94,7 +95,8 @@ <a href="http://www.atagar.com/arm/"><img src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Arm.jpg" alt="Arm Icon"></a> <h3><a href="http://www.atagar.com/arm/">Arm</a></h3> - <p>Terminal application for monitoring and configuring Tor.</p> + <p>Terminal (command line) application for monitoring + and configuring Tor.</p> </div> </td> </tr> @@ -141,7 +143,7 @@ src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Cloud.jpg" alt="Cloud Icon"></a> <h3><a href="https://cloud.torproject.org">Tor cloud</a></h3> <p>A user-friendly way of deploying bridges to help users - access an uncensored Internet.</p> + access the uncensored Internet.</p> </div> </td> </tr>