[tor-commits] r25529: {website} make the text more marketing-like. (website/trunk/getinvolved/en)

Sun Mar 11 23:32:57 UTC 2012

Author: phobos
Date: 2012-03-11 23:32:57 +0000 (Sun, 11 Mar 2012)
New Revision: 25529

Modified:
   website/trunk/getinvolved/en/relays.wml
Log:
make the text more marketing-like.


Modified: website/trunk/getinvolved/en/relays.wml
===================================================================

--- website/trunk/getinvolved/en/relays.wml	2012-03-11 23:25:58 UTC (rev 25528)
+++ website/trunk/getinvolved/en/relays.wml	2012-03-11 23:32:57 UTC (rev 25529)
@@ -11,43 +11,47 @@
   <div id="maincol"> 
     <!-- PUT CONTENT AFTER THIS TAG -->
 
-<h1>Be a part of the Tor network</h1>
+<h1>Join the Tor network</h1>
 <hr><br>
 <div class="underline"></div>
-<p><a href="http://www.tacticaltech.org/">Tactical Tech</a> has produced a
-video to encourage more people to become a part of the Tor network.
-Below is the English version. We are working on translated videos as
-well.</p>
+<p><a href="http://www.tacticaltech.org/">Tactical Tech</a> created a
+video to encourage you to join the Tor Network. If you'd like to help
+us translate it to your language, <a href="<page about/contact>">let
+us know!</a></p>
+
 <div class="center">
 <p><video id="v1" src="https://media.torproject.org/video/2012-03-04-BuildingBridges-HD.ogv" autobuffer="true" controls="controls"></video></p>
 </div>
+
 <p>The Tor network relies on volunteers to donate bandwidth. The more
-people who run Tor as a bridge or a relay, and become a part of the Tor
-network, the faster the network will be.</p>
+people who run Tor as a bridge or a relay, the faster and safer the
+network becomes.</p>
 
-
 <h2>Option 1: Use your own computer</h2>
 <p>You can run Tor as either a bridge or a relay. A bridge will usually
-see less traffic than a relay, and will only be used to transfer data
-from a client to the rest of the Tor network.</p>
+see less traffic than a relay, and will only be the first hop in the
+three hop circuit. </p>
+
 <h3>Windows</h3>
 <p>
 <ul>
-<li>Vidalia Bridge Bundle: <a href="<package-win32-bridge-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-bridge-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
-<li>Vidalia Relay Bundle: <a href="<package-win32-relay-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-relay-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
-<li>Vidalia Exit Bundle: <a href="<package-win32-exit-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-exit-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
+<li>Be a Bridge: <a href="<package-win32-bridge-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-bridge-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
+<li>Be a Relay: <a href="<package-win32-relay-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-relay-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
+<li>Be an Exit Relay: <a href="<package-win32-exit-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-win32-exit-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
 </ul>
+Read the instructions on how to configure a <a
+href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/bridges.html.en">bridge</a> or a
+<a href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/tor-doc-relay.html.en">relay</a>.
 </p>
 
 <h3>Mac OS X</h3>
 <p>
 <ul>
-<li>Vidalia Bundle, OS X Intel: <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
-<li>Vidalia Bundle, OS X Power PC: <a href="<package-osx-ppc-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-osx-ppc-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
-<li>Vidalia Bundle, OS X Intel, unstable: <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-alpha>">package</a>, <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-alpha>.asc">signature</a></li>
-<li>idalia Bundle, OS X Power PC, unstable: <a href="<package-osx-ppc-bundle-alpha>">package</a>, <a href="<package-osx-ppc-bundle-alpha>.asc">signature</a></li>
+<li>Be a Bridge (Intel Macs only): <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-stable>">package</a>, <a href="<package-osx-x86-bundle-stable>.asc">signature</a></li>
 </ul>
-Read the instructions for how to configure the Vidalia Bundle as either a <a href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/bridges.html.en">bridge</a> or a <a href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/tor-doc-relay.html.en">relay</a>.
+Read the instructions on how to configure a <a
+href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/bridges.html.en">bridge</a> or a
+<a href="https://www.torproject.org/docs/tor-doc-relay.html.en">relay</a>.
 </p>
 
 <h3>Linux</h3>
@@ -64,18 +68,24 @@
 
 <div class="nb">
 <h2>Option 2: Use the cloud</h2>
-<p><a href="https://cloud.torproject.org/">The Tor Cloud project</a> runs on the Amazon EC2 cloud computing platform, and gives you a user-friendly way of deploying bridges to help users access an uncensored Internet. Setting up a Tor bridge on Amazon EC2 is cheap, simple, and will only take you a couple of minutes.</p>
+<p><a href="https://cloud.torproject.org/">The Tor Cloud project</a>
+runs on the Amazon EC2 cloud computing platform. This gives you a
+user-friendly way of deploying bridges to help users access an uncensored
+Internet. Setting up a Tor bridge on Amazon EC2 is cheap, simple, and
+will only take you a couple of minutes.</p>
 </div>
 
 <div class="nb">
 <h2>Option 3: Donate</h2>
-<p>Both <a href="https://www.torservers.net/">torservers.net</a> and <a href="http://noisetor.net/">Noisetor</a> will turn donations into Tor exit relays.</p>
+<p>Both <a href="https://www.torservers.net/">torservers.net</a> and <a
+href="http://noisetor.net/">Noisetor</a> will turn donations into Tor
+exit relays.</p>
 </div>
 
 
-  </div>
-  <!-- END MAINCOL -->
-  <div id = "sidecol">
+</div>
+<!-- END MAINCOL -->
+<div id = "sidecol">
 #include "side.wmi"
 #include "info.wmi"
   </div>

