[tor-commits] r24253: {website} Clean up TAILS project descriptions (website/trunk/getinvolved/en)

[Robert Ransom]

Author: rransom
Date: 2011-02-22 03:30:33 +0000 (Tue, 22 Feb 2011)
New Revision: 24253

Modified:
   website/trunk/getinvolved/en/volunteer.wml
Log:
Clean up TAILS project descriptions

Modified: website/trunk/getinvolved/en/volunteer.wml
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--- website/trunk/getinvolved/en/volunteer.wml	2011-02-22 02:29:09 UTC (rev 24252)
+++ website/trunk/getinvolved/en/volunteer.wml	2011-02-22 03:30:33 UTC (rev 24253)
@@ -990,18 +990,18 @@
     Skill Level: <i>Low to Medium</i>
     <br>
     Likely Mentors: <i>intrigeri, anonym</i>
-    <p>Tor helps greatly publishing files anonymously. However, much personal
-    information can be enclosed *inside* such published files meta-data: GPS
-    coordinates, authors name and so on. Anyone who wants to anonymously
+    <p>Tor helps greatly in publishing files anonymously. However, much personal
+    information can be enclosed *inside* such published files' meta-data: GPS
+    coordinates, author's name and so on. Anyone who wants to anonymously
     publish a file can thus far too easily de-anonymize herself.</p>
-    <p>A set of tools allowing to easily inspect and cleanup meta-data in files
+    <p>A set of tools allowing users to easily inspect and clean up meta-data in files
     would benefit Tor users, and would e.g. be shipped in TAILS.</p>
     <p>A graphical user interface is a must, but library and command-line
     interfaces are most welcome so that future work can add support for
-    published files cleaning to various publishing tools, such as Desktop
+    cleaning published files to various publishing tools, such as desktop
     social networking clients and Web content management systems.</p>
-    <p>This project mostly consists in writing glue between the many existing
-    tools and libraries that provide read/write access to files meta-data. An
+    <p>This project mostly consists of writing glue between the many existing
+    tools and libraries that provide read/write access to files' meta-data. An
     extensible program design would probably be the best bet, so that support
     for other kinds of files can easily be added later.</p>
     <p>The meta-data cleaning toolkit would run at least on GNU/Linux;
@@ -1021,15 +1021,15 @@
     <br>
     Likely Mentors: <i>intrigeri, anonym</i>
     <p>Data persistence is a somewhat tricky topic in a Live system context,
-    especially one explicitly designed to avoid leaving any trace of its use
-    such as TAILS.</p>
-    <p>Some real-life usecases however require to setup some kind of data
+    especially one such as TAILS, which is explicitly designed to avoid
+    leaving any trace of its use.</p>
+    <p>Some real-life use cases, however, require some kind of data
     persistence. To start with, TAILS should (carefully) support persistence of
     application-specific configurations (e.g. GnuPG keyring) and of a user
     arbitrary data store. Note that persistence in TAILS will always be opt-in
     and require encrypted storage.</p>
-    <p>The backend part work consists in improving Debian Live existing
-    persistence features to make them suit the specific TAILS context. A trust
+    <p>The backend work consists of improving Debian Live's existing
+    persistence features to make them suit the specific context of TAILS. A trust
     relationship is already established with upstream who is happy to merge our
     changes. The codebase is not that small and much refactoring is needed, so
     this really is a programming project rather than a fire'n'forget shell
@@ -1037,7 +1037,7 @@
     <p>Anyone undertaking this project must be familiar with GNU/Linux, and
     preferably with Debian. Being able to (quickly learn to) write clean and
     safe programs in shell is also needed.</p>
-    <p>For more information see <a href="https://amnesia.boum.org/todo/persistence/">https://amnesia.boum.org/todo/persistence/</a></p>
+    <p>For more information, see <a href="https://amnesia.boum.org/todo/persistence/">https://amnesia.boum.org/todo/persistence/</a>.</p>
     
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