[or-cvs] r15317: a few more fixes (website/trunk/projects/en)

[arma at seul.org]

Author: arma
Date: 2008-06-16 22:07:17 -0400 (Mon, 16 Jun 2008)
New Revision: 15317

Modified:
   website/trunk/projects/en/hidserv.wml
   website/trunk/projects/en/lowbandwidth.wml
Log:
a few more fixes


Modified: website/trunk/projects/en/hidserv.wml
===================================================================
--- website/trunk/projects/en/hidserv.wml	2008-06-16 22:40:26 UTC (rev 15316)
+++ website/trunk/projects/en/hidserv.wml	2008-06-17 02:07:17 UTC (rev 15317)
@@ -167,7 +167,7 @@
   <td>
     <small><em>The original goal of analyzing the problems that lead to
     slowdown of Tor Hidden Services has been accomplished. Part of this
-    analysis were measurements of the delay that a user experiences when
+    analysis was measuring the delay that a user experiences when
     setting up or accessing a hidden service. Furthermore, measurement data
     from April 2008 could be leveraged to explore timings of internal
     substeps of establishing a connection to a hidden service. The results
@@ -177,14 +177,14 @@
     <a href="http://archives.seul.org/or/dev/Jun-2008/msg00019.html">developer
     mailing list</a>.</small></em>
     <br/>
-    <small><em>The analysis has unveiled a few bugs which were responsible
-    in part for the delay in making a hidden service available for
+    <small><em>The analysis also unveiled a few bugs which were responsible
+    for part of the delay in making a hidden service available for
     clients. Some bugs have been fixed subsequent to the analysis, others
     will be fixed soon. The evaluation has further brought up several
     possible approaches to improve Tor Hidden Service performance. Some of
     these ideas can be applied immediately, while others require deeper
     analysis and new measurements. Finally, in the course of the analysis,
-    it has been discovered that some improvements require more in-depth
+    we discovered that some improvements require more in-depth
     changes to Tor which are not directly related to hidden services. These
     changes cannot be achieved in the time frame of this
     project.</small></em>

Modified: website/trunk/projects/en/lowbandwidth.wml
===================================================================
--- website/trunk/projects/en/lowbandwidth.wml	2008-06-16 22:40:26 UTC (rev 15316)
+++ website/trunk/projects/en/lowbandwidth.wml	2008-06-17 02:07:17 UTC (rev 15317)
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@
     138</a> shrinks consensus documents by 30% to
     40% and has already been implemented and merged into the spec.
     Implementation is part of the 0.2.1.x-alpha tree and the code will
-    take effect used once over two-thirds of the directory authorities
+    take effect once over two-thirds of the directory authorities
     (i.e. 5 out of 6) have upgraded.</small></em>
     <br />
     <small><em><a href="https://svn.torproject.org/svn/tor/trunk/doc/spec/proposals/140-consensus-diffs.txt">Proposal