[or-cvs] r12115: Updated introductory paragraph on jeff's version of the inde (website/trunk/en)

[phobos at seul.org]

Author: phobos
Date: 2007-10-22 20:52:56 -0400 (Mon, 22 Oct 2007)
New Revision: 12115

Modified:
   website/trunk/en/jeff-index.wml
Log:
Updated introductory paragraph on jeff's version of the index


Modified: website/trunk/en/jeff-index.wml
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--- website/trunk/en/jeff-index.wml	2007-10-23 00:47:11 UTC (rev 12114)
+++ website/trunk/en/jeff-index.wml	2007-10-23 00:52:56 UTC (rev 12115)
@@ -25,10 +25,11 @@
 <hr />
 
 <p>
-Tor keeps you anonymous on the Internet, protecting
-you from a variety of threats by bouncing your communications
-around a worldwide set of servers to mask where they came from.
-There are many reasons to use Tor. For example:
+Tor helps keep you anonymous on the Internet.  It transfers your
+communications around a worldwide set of servers.  This masks your
+destination and source locations.  This provides some protections from a
+variety of attacks from a variety of people and organizations on the
+Internet.  There are many reasons to use Tor. For example:
 <ul>
 <li>You live in a country that restricts access to certain sites or services.
 Tor hides where you go on the Internet from your ISP,