[tor-bugs] #6922 [Company]: Write the storyboard/script for this video

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#6922: Write the storyboard/script for this video
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     Reporter:  phobos   |      Owner:
         Type:  project  |     Status:  new
     Priority:  normal   |  Milestone:
    Component:  Company  |    Version:
   Resolution:           |   Keywords:  SponsorI
Actual Points:           |  Parent ID:  #5991
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Comment (by runa):

 You mentioned on IRC that the target audience is somewhere between a
 normal user and a tech savvy user. You may want to consider rewriting the
 script to target only one type of user.

 '''Slide 1''': You may want to consider introducing yourself by name,
 though this is not a requirement or anything.

 '''Slide 2''': The name Tor is
 [https://www.torproject.org/docs/faq.html.en#WhyCalledTor not an acronym]
 these days, just a name. You may want to try and simplify the first
 sentence, non-technical users will not necessarily understand what a
 "third-generation onion routing project" is. Instead of stating that the
 Tor Project is a 501(c)(3), perhaps just say that the Tor Project is a US-
 based non-profit organization.

 '''Slide 3''': You may want to simplify this statement and drop the part
 where you talk about directly connecting users. A user who is new to Tor
 may not understand what this means.

 '''Slide 4''': You may want to rephrase this first sentence (see the ''Why
 Anonymity Matters'' section on the front page of our website). Tor does
 not hide the fact that you are communicating. You should also rephrase the
 sentence which says that ''Tor encrypts all your data'', we don't want
 users to think Tor does end-to-end encryption between the user and the
 destination website. Be careful about using words which you have not yet
 explained, such as the word ''relay'' and ''operator'' and ''Tor
 network''.

 '''Slide 5''': The example on this slide needs some work; remember that
 the web server for the site you are visiting will also know who you are,
 non-technical users may not know what ''login credentials'' are, and this
 issue is bigger than just people knowing where you are on a map.

 '''Slide 6''': The blob of data that your Tor client sends to the guard
 relay is wrapped in three layers of encryption, the three relays in your
 circuit will decrypt one layer each. Your explanation as to why Tor can't
 encrypt the Internet end-to-end is a bit confusing, you may want to leave
 this out and just state the facts and what the user can do instead. Again,
 be careful about using words which you have not yet explained, such as
 ''exit node operator'' and '''HTTPS'''. Whether or not to include large
 scale surveillance and MITM depends on your target audience.

 '''Slide 7''': You may want to remind users to only use the Tor Browser
 for Tor-related things. You tell users to avoid login-over-HTTP, extra
 addons in the Tor Browser, and DOC/PDF documents, but do not tell them
 what they should do instead. This will probably leave a lot of users with
 more questions than answers.

 '''Slide 8''': You should explain what a relay is first, then go on to
 talk about all the awesome volunteers all over the world who contribute to
 the Tor network by running relays.

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