[tbb-dev] How much the Tor Browser is still a Bundle?
mikeperry at torproject.org
Tue Mar 11 18:46:59 UTC 2014
> Mark Smith wrote (11 Mar 2014 17:23:58 GMT) :
> > OK by me. My only suggestion is to consider changing the last one to:
> > "Please wait while a connection to the Tor network is established."
> Just my 2cts: most technical documentation style guides I've read
> recommend to avoid the passive voice.
Suggestions then? If you've read a large number of style guides, your
direct input would be even more valuable than negative feedback by
"Please wait while we establish a connection to the Tor network."?
Is "we" too unclear to be an active subject? That was my initial
estimation, but maybe it is still better than passive.
"Please wait while Tor establishes a network connection" is another
Are either of these acceptable? If not, do you have another suggestion?
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